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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Introduction
Body paragraph 1
It is argued that people should stop using
vehicles
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 powered by petrol or diesel and switch to electric alternatives. I completely agree with
this
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 view because electric
vehicles
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 can help protect the environment by reducing carbon emissions and dependence on fossil
fuels
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.
Body paragraph 2
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Body paragraph 3
Vehicles
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 that burn fossil
fuels
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 are a major source of air pollution and greenhouse gas emissions. These pollutants contribute to global warming and can cause serious respiratory problems in humans.
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, fossil
fuels
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 are non-renewable resources that will eventually run out. Many countries depend on imported petrol and diesel to meet their transportation needs, which can increase costs and create economic difficulties.
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, continuing to rely heavily on fossil-fuel-powered
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 can harm both the environment and the economy.
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In contrast
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, electric
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 offer a more environmentally friendly alternative because they produce no direct exhaust emissions
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 driving.
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 can significantly improve air quality, particularly in crowded cities where traffic pollution is a serious concern.
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, electric cars can be charged using renewable energy sources,
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 as solar power. Unlike fossil
fuels
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, solar energy is naturally replenished and does not run out through consumption. If more countries invest in renewable electricity and charging facilities, electric
vehicles
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 could become an effective and sustainable means of transportation.
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 would
also
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 reduce the need to depend on imported fossil
fuels
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.
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Conclusion
Conclusion
In conclusion, I strongly believe that petrol- and diesel-powered cars should be replaced with electric
vehicles
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 because
this
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 transition can reduce air pollution, conserve natural resources and help combat climate change.

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Task response
Your view is clear from the start and stays the same. To make it stronger, explain why a full ban is needed, not only why electric cars are good. You could also say how people with low pay or those in rural areas can make this change.
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Your main ideas are clear: less air pollution, less harm to the climate, and less need for oil. Add one real or clear example, such as busy city streets, to make the ideas feel more full.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear plan: opening, two main parts, and ending. Each part has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
Coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “Furthermore”, “In contrast”, “Moreover”, and “Therefore”. Try not to use “This” too often at the start of a sentence. Name the idea again when needed, for example, “This move to electric cars”.
Coherence and cohesion
The second main part repeats the idea of less need for imported fossil fuels. You could use that space for a new point, such as lower noise in cities or lower running costs for drivers.
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You answer the question directly and clearly state that you agree with the ban.
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Your reasons are on topic and support your view throughout the essay.
Coherence and cohesion
The opening tells the reader what you think and gives the two main reasons.
Coherence and cohesion
The ending clearly brings together the main points without adding a new idea.
Coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is clear: first the harm from fossil-fuel cars, then the good points of electric cars.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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