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The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the mean house prices in countries A, B and C over the period from 1997 to 2014.
Overall
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, the average
price
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 of the three countries was higher
at the end
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 of the time range than at the beginning of it, despite the fact that all of them experienced a decrease
through
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over
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 the interval. Starting from about $125k in 1997, the average house
price
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 in
Country
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 A increased to about $200k in 2000, with the later rapid growth to more than $500k in 2003. After the fluctuation to about $480k in 2006, the
price
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 continued increasing, reaching approximately $625k in 2014. A similar situation was in
Country
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 B, starting at almost the same $125k in 1997, the
price
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 increased to $375k in 2005. Later on, the mean
price
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 decreased to about $260k in
2008
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2008,
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 with
the
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a
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 rise to $500k
at the end
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 of the interval.
Furthermore
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, the prices in
Country
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 A and
b
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B
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 were on the same level
about
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, about
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 $260k in 2000. The average
price
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 in
Country
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 C,
however
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, was lower than in the two described above, starting with about $120k in 1997, with the continuous growth to about $245k in 2007, reaching about $260k
at the end
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with
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, with
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the
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a
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 small fluctuation in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, k, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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