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Practice: You will be graduating from university and would like to invite your family to the ceremony. Write a letter of invitation to your parents. In the letter: - Explain that you have completed your studies - Give details of the event, including time, date and dress code - Let them know how many tickets they have and who they are for

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Dear Mom and Dad How are you doing? It's been a long time since we met . I am extremely glad to let you know that
i've
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I've
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 successfully completed my studies
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 science
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 month.
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However
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 it was not easy at all, but with your support and encouragement,
i
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I
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 am
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 graduating from the university. So, here
i'm
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 giving all of my family members the invitation to attend
this
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 great event. Let me give you the exact details of the event, you will be surprised to know that it is happening on my birthday date, which is on 19th
june
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June
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. Be ready to wake up early
morning
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in the morning
 as it will
commense
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commence
 at sharp 8:00 AM.
This
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 time, the black suits are announced as the official dress code for all the guests
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 the family members. Luckily, we've got four tickets
which
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 three of
them
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 are for the family
menbers
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members
,
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 the
another
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other
 one is for the guest we'd like to invite to
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 event. Hope you all are excited! Can't wait to see you all soon! Best Wishes, John

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task response
Give the full date, such as 19 June 2027, and add the place of the event. This will make the invite more useful.
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Make the ticket plan clear. Say who gets each of the four tickets, for example Mom, Dad, a family member, and one guest.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, event details, and ticket details. Use shorter sentences to make the ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Put the date, time, and dress code in one short part. Then put all ticket details in the next part.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words such as “Also”, “Finally”, and “Because” to join ideas.
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You say that you have finished your studies and that you are graduating.
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You give the date, time, and dress code for the event.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a warm greeting and a friendly ending.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has its own job: your good news, the event details, and the tickets.
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