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The provided line graph illustrates information about the amount of carbon dioxide produced by each person in different European countries, between 1967 and 2007.

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The provided line graph illustrates information about the amount of carbon dioxide produced by each person in different European countries, between 1967 and 2007.
The provided line graph illustrates information about the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 produced by each person in different European countries, between 1967 and 2007. The data is measured in metric
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the figure for
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted per individual in Portugal and in Italy showed a significant rise,
whereas
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 the amount of CO2 produced in the UK and in Sweden experienced a noticeable fall throughout the period. Looking at the details,
emitted
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 CO2 in Portugal jumped from approximately 3 to almost 6 metric
tonnes
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 over the 40 years. A similar trend was observed in Italy. In
1967
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1967,
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 the figure for produced
carbon
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dioxide
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 was roughly 5
and
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 it rose to almost 8 metric
tonnes
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 by the end of the period.
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, the UK was the only country
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 which peaked at around 11 metric
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in
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 the beginning of the period.
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,
this
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 country showed a gradual decline
in
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over
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 40 years.
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, the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 discharged in Sweden declined as well. Starting with 7 metric
tonnes
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, Swedish emissions showed an upward trend to 10 metric
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 in 1977, before experiencing a dramatic drop from 1977 to 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provided" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • CO2 emissions per person
  • per capita emissions
  • the amount of CO2 produced
  • emission levels
  • a gradual increase
  • a steady rise
  • a sharp decline
  • a slight fall
  • remain relatively stable
  • reach a peak
  • fall steadily
  • rise considerably
  • overtake another country
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest level
  • a significant difference
  • over the 40-year period
  • at the beginning of the period
  • by the end of the period
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