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The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.

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The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.
The pie chart shows the breakdown of power generation in Ireland
and
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 the table presents information on
main
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the main
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 causes for electricity
consumption
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 in the same country.
Overall
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, it is apparent from the illustration that the major source of Irish electricity
come
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comes
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 from fossil fuels,
whereas
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 renewable sources play
minor
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a minor
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 role. In
case
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the case
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 of
consumption
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, heating accounts for more than half.
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 with, coal is the leading
supply
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source
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 of electricity with 45%, followed by gas with 35%. Together they generate 80% of all
courtier’s
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courtiers’
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 power.
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, renewable sources contribute only a fifth of production: wind and solar 10% each. Turning to usage, heating accounts for just over half of the total
consumption
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which
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 is 55%,
while
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 all the other purposes combined don’t even reach that amount.
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 ranked second with 20%, followed by kitchen appliances of 15%. Consumer electronics and phone charging are the smallest categories, demanding together only 10% of the
consumption
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, with 5% each.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity grid
  • Renewable energy
  • Environmental impact
  • Economy
  • Energy mix
  • Carbon emissions
  • Industrial consumption
  • Residential use
  • Government policy
  • Seasonal variations
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