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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree?

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Introduction
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 some people argue about fast cooking and its results. There are two sides. The first one, who says that junk cuisine is not dangerous, or is not effective in lifestyle, even though scholars have talked about that and its bad effects. The second side, which believes in the scholars' words. So,
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 what I will discuss.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, I am with the second side. Why? Let me explain it. The first reason is that we can notice the fat bodies. There are two reasons to be fat, in the beginning, maybe from their genetics, and
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 reason is not casual. The second reason is caused by junk meat.
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, to complete the opinion, we can observe the athletic people
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 they almost do not eat
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 type of fare, because they know the result if they eat it.
Body paragraph 2
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, the obesiry, it is
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 caused by
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 cooking. Just ask anyone who has an obese body, what does he usually eat? His answer will be , of course, Pepsi,burger, French fries, and maybe pork. These all reasons recommend the negative aspects of fast snacks.
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, if we eat healthy feed,
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 will probably affect the average, and make it lower than before.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I do not mean that you can not eat fast bread forever,
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 I mean that you need to focus in what you eat, because if you will eat a lot of junk meal the result is many issues in your body, but if you eat it less, that's okay to evenness,
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, hang in the food is a beautifal thing, because when you balance you can eat anythins you want in
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 life, but just hang.

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Give your view clearly in the first part. Say that you agree that fast food can harm diet and daily life, then keep this same view in all parts.
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Develop each main idea more. For example, explain how fast food can lead to too much fat, and how this can affect health and daily life.
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Use careful examples. Do not say that all large people eat the same food. Instead, say that eating fast food often may raise the risk of weight gain.
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Answer all parts of the question. Write about both diet and lifestyle, such as poor food habits, low energy, less sport, and health problems.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body part about one clear idea. One part can be about diet, and the next can be about lifestyle and health.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show the order of ideas: First, Second, For example, As a result, and In conclusion.
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Avoid very short parts and questions to the reader, such as 'Why?' or 'Just ask anyone'. State your point in a full, clear way instead.
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Keep the end short and clear. Repeat your main view and the two main reasons without adding new ideas.
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You give a clear main view: you agree that fast food can have bad effects.
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You try to support your view with ideas about weight, health, and people who do sport.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an opening, body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as 'Overall', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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