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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university

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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university
The table provides information about the proportion of various aspects of university
namely
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 teaching quality,
print
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resources
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, electronic
resources
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,
range
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 of
modules
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 offered and buildings/teaching
facilities
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 asked students regarding to surveys contented in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Units are measured in
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest ranked aspect of
university
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a university
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 was
print
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resources
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,
while
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 the reverse was true for
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range
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the range
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 of
modules
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 offered.
Additionally
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, buildings and teaching
facilities
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 witnessed the exact same results in all of the given years. In 2000,
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achieved the highest percentage among students in
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the survey
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 at 84%,
whereas
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range
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the range
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 of
modules
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experienced the lowest ratings at 32%. During a decade period, the figure for
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resources
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 peaked at 89% in 2005, before declining
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to 88% in 2010.
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, teaching quality and electronic
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 accounted for 65% and 45%, respectively. Turning to 2010, electronic and
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resources
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 achieved
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 ratings at 88%,
while
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 the least chosen aspects of
university
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the university
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was
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were the
range
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 of
modules
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 at 27%. Teaching quality and
buildings
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building
facilities
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 had accounted for 69% and 77% by the end of the period ,
although
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 building and teaching
facilities
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 remained relatively stable.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words print, resources, range, modules, facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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