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You are living in an English speaking country and the restaurant near you is making a lot of noise. Write a letter to the restaurant owner. Cover the following: - tell restaurant owner to reduce the noise levels. - suggest a solution to fix the problem. - warn that if this problem remains not solved then further action will be taken

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apprise you of my dissatisfaction with the incessant noise coming from your restaurant every day. As your restaurant is in our residential area, you should be mindful that you are not supposed to create an inappropriate, noisy environment for other residents
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 running your business. Especially, the loud music is what bothers us the most at night.
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, we kindly request that you take effective measures to mitigate the noise level. To address
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 concern, I would recommend that you
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 the outside chairs in the restaurant to the other side, facing the playground.
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 would make a significant difference.
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, you should obey the authority's policies
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 and set the volume as per the guidelines.
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,
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 will resolve our major concern. Unfortunately, we have to take
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 actions by notifying the local authorities to overcome
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 problem if it still continues even
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this
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 request.
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, I would like you to understand and handle
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 matter in a respectful and cooperative way to avoid any strict actions from the police. I hope you will resolve
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 issue and keep the peace of our locality maintained. I look forward to hearing from you, John Sith

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You cover all parts of the task: the noise, a way to fix it, and what you will do if it goes on. Add a little more detail about when the noise is worst and how it affects you.
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Make the request more direct. For example: “Please reduce the music after 10 p.m.” This makes your aim very clear.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use simple link words such as “First”, “Also”, and “If this does not stop” to make the ideas flow more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are long and have too many ideas. Keep one main idea in each sentence, so the reader can follow your message more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Check small grammar points. Write “I recommend that you move the outside chairs”, not “I recommend that you shifting the outside chairs”.
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You give a clear reason for writing and state that loud music at night is the main problem.
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You give a clear warning that you may contact the local authorities if the problem does not stop.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear job: the problem, a possible fix, and the next step.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and suitable for a formal letter.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resident
  • disruptive
  • soundproofing
  • mitigation
  • quality of life
  • operating hours
  • formal avenues
  • maintaining a good relationship
  • constructive suggestion
  • impacting
  • abated
  • notify local authorities
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