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Band 5.5

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

Traffic congestion and
pollution
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 have become global issues.
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, it is possible to control these problems by escalating the cost of fuel. I totally agree with
this
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 because
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conomy is a factor which
influence
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 the most in many situations There are many benefits
of
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 raising rates of petrol.
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, due to
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igh rates
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nobody will want to buy private cars. People will use local transport for
long distance
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such
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 as buses ,trains, ship or
air planes
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aeroplanes
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, and short distance will be covered by bicycle.
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 will help a lot in declining traffic burden, daily accidents and noise
pollution
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.
Occurrence
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 of
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ccident will decrease ,due to high prices
less
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 automobiles will be
on road
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 and there will be easy for
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overnment to control accidents and mishaps on roads.
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, contamination of
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nvironment with impurities will be minimized by setting up high prices of vehicle oils. Due to
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se of less fuel ,the emission of carbon monoxide will be reduced. Environment Defence Fund estimates that on-road vehicles are the cause of one-
third
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 of the air
pollution
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.
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, we have to take
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ew steps to combat
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,
otherwise
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, we will pay
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uge amount.
Everyday
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 approximately 200 tons of impurities in just 12 square meter is noted.
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 of patient of
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espiratory track has increased due to uncontrolled gases emitted from road vehicles. To conclude, it is recommended that government should
rise
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 the price of fuel to get rid of all problems caused by traffic and there must be proper rules and regulation regarding
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umber of cars and
pollution
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 on
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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