Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

An increasing concern for many
governments
around the world is the declining
health
of their citizens due to a poor
diet
. While some people believe
governments
should be responsible for improving the
health
of their nation, others believe it is up to the individual.
This
essay will examine both sides of the argument. There is no doubt that individuals must take some responsibility for their
diet
and
health
. The argument to support
this
is the fact that adults have free will and make their own choices about what they eat and the exercise that they do. Children are
also
becoming less healthy.
However
, their parents are the ones who provide their evening meals so it is their responsibility to ensure these meals are nutritious and encourage them to avoid junk
food
and sugary snacks during the day. Despite these arguments, there is
also
a case for advocating the intervention of the state. People these days often have little choice but to depend on fast
food
or ready meals that are high in sugar, salt and fat due to the pressures of work.
Governments
could regulate the ingredients of
such
food
. Some
governments
also
spend huge amounts of tax money on treating
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ealth problems of their citizens in hospitals. It would be logical to spend
this
on preventative measures
such
as campaigns to encourage exercise and a good
diet
. Having considered both sides of the issue, I would argue that
although
individuals must take ultimate responsibility for what they eat,
governments
also
have a role to play as only they can regulate the
food
supply, which openly encourages a poor
diet
. It is only through
this
combination that we can improve people’s
health
.
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