A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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form a chain of
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cosystem, and exploitation of these creatures will lead to
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mbalance in nature, as they reduce in
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, so they should have
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ame rights as humans.
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, employing
animals
and using them for consumption and research leads to scarcity of
animals
while
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they too have equal
right
to live. In my opinion,
animals
should not be exploited by
people
since they too have the
right
to live.
Animals
should be given equal importance as humans, we can find industries producing commercial goods made of animal products.
For instance
,
hand bags
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and belts are found to be made of animal skin, which
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used by
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arge population irrespective of gender.
Furthermore
,
animals
are trained for human benefits where
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they are bought from
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orest into the city and trained to work in
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ircus and
also
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oo.
Moreover
, most of the products are clinically tested on
animals
in laboratories in order to prove that they can use it safely.
Besides
this
, humans consume most of the animal meat which leads to killing of
animals
to satisfy human hunger. All these have resulted in
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eduction of animal species and some are at their extinction. Some
people
think
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animals
are meant to
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their various needs as they are easily
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and can be cloned to increase in number.
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, parties are incomplete without non-vegetarian diet, and high society
people
use expensive e accessories made of animal products, all these are matters of prestige which are fulfilled at cost of animal life and important for them to maintain their standard.
However
, I feel
animals
should have
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reedom and equal
right
to live their life along with their families and should not be exploited by
people
. In short,
animals
are
also
living beings and all living life have
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ight to live according to their will so we have no
right
to mistreat or kill them.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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