Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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people
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doing the same things and cancelling any
change
in their
lives
In my opinion when
people
want to develop or want to
change
their
lives
,
however
when I think changing is always is not good things sometimes they getting worst than they expecting. It is not
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ood idea to
change
if you want to
change
think what you need that the priority. Find a better career. Trying all your best to improved forwards and trying to think positive
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not negative thinking try to think the outcome for your results what you have done wrong would make better. I would say that if you have exams you need to progress and test your ability and need to
change
your progression
also
to be successful person ,you need to
change
not completely
change
but
change
your weaknesses to be your strength and the new idea new
change
in your life to have knowledge and experience. No one can
change
the person is really difficult to
change
someone to have better
lives
such
as homeless or someone love money than anything else. If you want to
change
it is your responsibility to
change
yourself to be better.
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obviously big different from the rich
people
and the poor
people
, the rich
people
can
change
all the time like
change
his
lives
or having good conditions and have security life but the poor
people
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always is
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pposite way.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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