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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#people #lives #change
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hoice to spend their
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 doing the same things and cancelling any
change
 in their
lives
 In my opinion when
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 want to develop or want to
change
 their
lives
,
however
 when I think changing is always is not good things sometimes they getting worst than they expecting. It is not
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ood idea to
change
 if you want to
change
 think what you need that the priority. Find a better career. Trying all your best to improved forwards and trying to think positive
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not negative thinking try to think the outcome for your results what you have done wrong would make better. I would say that if you have exams you need to progress and test your ability and need to
change
 your progression
also
 to be successful person ,you need to
change
 not completely
change
 but
change
 your weaknesses to be your strength and the new idea new
change
 in your life to have knowledge and experience. No one can
change
 the person is really difficult to
change
 someone to have better
lives
such
 as homeless or someone love money than anything else. If you want to
change
 it is your responsibility to
change
 yourself to be better.
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 obviously big different from the rich
people
 and the poor
people
, the rich
people
 can
change
 all the time like
change
 his
lives
 or having good conditions and have security life but the poor
people
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 always is
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pposite way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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