In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

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Nowadays undoubtedly crimes are increasing more as compared to the past in both developing and developed countries. Many of the

people

want to live in a secure environment and they want to spend their lives peacefully,

therefore

most of the population of developing countries want to migrate to developed countries for the good quality of life. I will share my views about

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topic and will

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give some opinions. Every country has laws and regulations, but

people

those who are living in a country not importantly follow all laws. Every individual is different and if they

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the laws they can live happily and peacefully. Sometime situation become worsts due to which a person become a criminal;

firstly

, unemployment is one of the major

issue

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, because of frustration lots of

people

become thief, trying to harm other

people

. Due to overcrowding

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the job opportunities are declining remarkably.

Secondly

, Illiteracy; we can see that in most of

the poor areas peoples

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the peoples of the poor area

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are uneducated and

also

they didn’t get exposure with the good environment

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if someone

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them they get involved in those kinds of activities that are really become dangerous for

people

Government

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The government

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have to support the

people

and they

also

have to arrange some kind of seminars or provide teaching sessions in the areas where

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mostly

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people

are uneducated. They have to arrange

such

kind of things because of which

people

can get encouragement.

Thirdly

, the major issue is inequality.

People

those are rich they are respectful. Poor

people

always get ignored in many situations. There should be

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equal rights for the

people

so that everybody

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qual chance to enjoy and live their life happily. To sum up, there are lots of reasons

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the criminal activities. Nobody is born criminal but situations due to which

people

get forced to do crimes like financial crisis, expenses, illiteracy, inequality etc.

in my opinion

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, in my opinion,

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it is the responsibility of the government to estimate which is the most occurring reason of crime and try to reduce it for sake of peoples.

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