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In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

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Nowadays undoubtedly crimes are increasing more as compared to the past in both developing and developed countries. Many of the
people
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 want to live in a secure environment and they want to spend their lives peacefully,
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 most of the population of developing countries want to migrate to developed countries for the good quality of life. I will share my views about
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 give some opinions. Every country has laws and regulations, but
people
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 those who are living in a country not importantly follow all laws. Every individual is different and if they
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 the laws they can live happily and peacefully. Sometime situation become worsts due to which a person become a criminal;
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, unemployment is one of the major
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, because of frustration lots of
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 become thief, trying to harm other
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. Due to overcrowding
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the job opportunities are declining remarkably.
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, Illiteracy; we can see that in most of
the poor areas peoples
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the peoples of the poor area
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 are uneducated and
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 they didn’t get exposure with the good environment
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 if someone
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 them they get involved in those kinds of activities that are really become dangerous for
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.
Government
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 have to support the
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 and they
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 have to arrange some kind of seminars or provide teaching sessions in the areas where
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people
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 are uneducated. They have to arrange
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 kind of things because of which
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 can get encouragement.
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, the major issue is inequality.
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 those are rich they are respectful. Poor
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 always get ignored in many situations. There should be
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equal rights for the
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 so that everybody
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qual chance to enjoy and live their life happily. To sum up, there are lots of reasons
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 the criminal activities. Nobody is born criminal but situations due to which
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 get forced to do crimes like financial crisis, expenses, illiteracy, inequality etc.
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 it is the responsibility of the government to estimate which is the most occurring reason of crime and try to reduce it for sake of peoples.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • violent crimes
  • socioeconomic factors
  • law enforcement
  • technology
  • education
  • employment
  • drug abuse
  • alcohol abuse
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • effectiveness
  • investing
  • job creation
  • social support
  • community engagement
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