In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

Nowadays undoubtedly crimes are increasing more as compared to the past in both developing and developed countries. Many of the
people
want to live in a secure environment and they want to spend their lives peacefully,
therefore
most of the population of developing countries want to migrate to developed countries for the good quality of life. I will share my views about
this
topic and will
also
give some opinions. Every country has laws and regulations, but
people
those who are living in a country not importantly follow all laws. Every individual is different and if they
follows
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follow

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the laws they can live happily and peacefully. Sometime situation become worsts due to which a person become a criminal;
firstly
, unemployment is one of the major
issue
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issues

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, because of frustration lots of
people
become thief, trying to harm other
people
. Due to overcrowding
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,

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the job opportunities are declining remarkably.
Secondly
, Illiteracy; we can see that in most of
the poor areas peoples
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the peoples of the poor area
the peoples of the poor areas

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are uneducated and
also
they didn’t get exposure with the good environment
,
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apply

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if someone
pressurize
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pressurizes

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them they get involved in those kinds of activities that are really become dangerous for
people
.
Government
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The government

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have to support the
people
and they
also
have to arrange some kind of seminars or provide teaching sessions in the areas where
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most

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mostly
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most

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people
are uneducated. They have to arrange
such
kind of things because of which
people
can get encouragement.
Thirdly
, the major issue is inequality.
People
those are rich they are respectful. Poor
people
always get ignored in many situations. There should be
the
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apply

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equal rights for the
people
so that everybody
get
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gets

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e
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an

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qual chance to enjoy and live their life happily. To sum up, there are lots of reasons
of
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for

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the criminal activities. Nobody is born criminal but situations due to which
people
get forced to do crimes like financial crisis, expenses, illiteracy, inequality etc.
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,

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it is the responsibility of the government to estimate which is the most occurring reason of crime and try to reduce it for sake of peoples.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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