Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience

Nowadays poor nations need
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the

The noun phrase support seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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s
upport of the
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well-developed

It appears that well developed is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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well developed
countries
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apply

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,
so that
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the

It appears that an article is missing before the word government. Consider adding the article.

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g
overnment of poor
countries
can provide all the basic necessities of the lives to their citizens. In poor
countries
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,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase In poor countries. Consider adding a comma.

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the most basic issues are poverty, nutrition, uneducated people, unemployment and commerce. I totally in
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favour

The spelling of favor is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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favor
of
this
topic and will share my views about it. Richest
countries
are strong enough to provide the basic facilities to the poor nations.
For example
, Africa is one of the developing
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countries

The singular countable noun country follows the quantifier one of, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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country
, the people of that
country
don’t have proper health facilities, employment and trade. The government of that
country
seek help from
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the

The noun phrase richest country seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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r
ichest
country
and due to
this
that nation has improved now.
Although
, there
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are

The singular verb form is does not seem to agree with the plural subject good health facilities. Consider changing the verb form.

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is
not good health facilities are available, unemployment and poverty
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are

It appears that the singular verb is does not agree with the plural compound subject unemployment and poverty. Consider changing the verb to the plural form.

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is
even present but it has been changed a lot if we compare it with
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the

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p
ast.
Furthermore
, richest
countries
provide loans to
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those

The determiner that may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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that
poor
countries
if needed; so the government can plan new strategies
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on

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how to improve their
country
’s economy.
Moreover
, it is very important for a
country
who borrow a sum of money from
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the

It appears that the phrase a richest countries does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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a
richest
countries
they should have to return it on time because
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apply

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,
they will gain trust from them and if any problem will initiate they will be always there to help.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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