Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with food and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience

Nowadays poor nations need
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upport of the
well developed
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countries
,
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so that
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overnment of poor
countries
can provide all the basic necessities of the lives to their citizens. In poor
countries
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the most basic issues are poverty, nutrition, uneducated people, unemployment and commerce. I totally in
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of
this
topic and will share my views about it. Richest
countries
are strong enough to provide the basic facilities to the poor nations.
For example
, Africa is one of the developing
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, the people of that
country
don’t have proper health facilities, employment and trade. The government of that
country
seek help from
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ichest
country
and due to
this
that nation has improved now.
Although
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not good health facilities are available, unemployment and poverty
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even present but it has been changed a lot if we compare it with
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ast.
Furthermore
, richest
countries
provide loans to
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poor
countries
if needed; so the government can plan new strategies
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how to improve their
country
’s economy.
Moreover
, it is very important for a
country
who borrow a sum of money from
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richest
countries
they should have to return it on time because
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they will gain trust from them and if any problem will initiate they will be always there to help.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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