Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays
people
don’t have much time to spend on reading
newspaper
, so they mostly try to find the easiest way to get up -to -date. Obviously
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nternet is playing
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a

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ital role in
people
lives to get all kind of
news
faster and in
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asier way. But
n
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ewspaper will be always valuable because mostly older generations like to read
news
from
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the
a

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ewspaper. If we can take an example of our new generation, they
seems
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seem

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too much busy in studying and doing
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the
a

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ob, so probably they can’t prefer to read
news
from
n
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the
a

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ewspaper; but
people
those who are habitual to read
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the
a

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ewspaper daily especially, our
elders
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elder's
elders'

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grandfather and grandmother they can’t become convinced to see
news
on
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nternet and most of our elder usually don’t know how to use computer, laptops and mobile phones.
Furthermore
, newspapers would be always available if you missed
to read
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reading

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any information but if you prefer to see online
news
from
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nternet so couldn’t find that
news
again or you will find incomplete information.
Additionally
, newspapers are now
also
available in the form of magazines and source of entertainment
such
as crosswords and puzzles,
these kind
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this kind
these kinds

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of activities attract
people
and refresh their minds.
Moreover
, in
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ibrary you can see magazines and
newspaper
are always there for reading, so definitely there will be any reason for it! Many
people
think that reading
newspaper
improve
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improves

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their communication skill as well as they learn new vocabulary. In schools, teachers
also
involve children to find out different things from newspapers and magazines depend on the topic assigned. To sum up, no doubt
newspaper
are
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mportant source to get updated
news
for
people
and it will never
ended
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end

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up. Technology use
is depend
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depends

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on
people
if they prefer to update themselves by using
internet
its
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it's
it is

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their choice.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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