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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays
people
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 don’t have much time to spend on reading
newspaper
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, so they mostly try to find the easiest way to get up -to -date. Obviously
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nternet is playing
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ital role in
people
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 lives to get all kind of
news
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 faster and in
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asier way. But
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ewspaper will be always valuable because mostly older generations like to read
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ewspaper. If we can take an example of our new generation, they
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 too much busy in studying and doing
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ob, so probably they can’t prefer to read
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ewspaper; but
people
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 those who are habitual to read
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ewspaper daily especially, our
elders
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 grandfather and grandmother they can’t become convinced to see
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nternet and most of our elder usually don’t know how to use computer, laptops and mobile phones.
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, newspapers would be always available if you missed
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 any information but if you prefer to see online
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nternet so couldn’t find that
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 again or you will find incomplete information.
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, newspapers are now
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 available in the form of magazines and source of entertainment
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 as crosswords and puzzles,
these kind
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 of activities attract
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 and refresh their minds.
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, in
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ibrary you can see magazines and
newspaper
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 are always there for reading, so definitely there will be any reason for it! Many
people
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 think that reading
newspaper
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improve
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 their communication skill as well as they learn new vocabulary. In schools, teachers
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newspaper
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 are
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mportant source to get updated
news
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 for
people
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 and it will never
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 up. Technology use
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 on
people
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 if they prefer to update themselves by using
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 their choice.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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