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Some people think that the teenager’s years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #teenager’s #years #times #people’s #lives #adult #life #happiness #spite #responsibilities
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There are different stages of
life
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. Most
people
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 enjoyed as a
teenager
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 and many of the
people
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likes
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 their
adult
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life
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.
Teenager
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life
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 is totally different from
adult
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life
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, both have different taste. Many
people
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 have
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ssumption that
teenager
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 lives bring more happiness, on another hand the concept is totally different some
of
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p
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eople consider
adult
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life
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 happier. I will discuss both
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 of views and give my opinion. Those who believe teenage years are happiest for
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 because parents are always there for support, dependency
make
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 them strong enough to deal with the difficulties example
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 if a
teenager
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get
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 ill
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 a mother or father will support to get off from school or college. At the
time
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 of teenage the main focus is on studies and whenever possible they can spend
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 with friends and relatives. Socialization is more at the
time
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 of teenage years.
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, when
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become
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 an adolescent
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 they have
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eal to achieve
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oal. Confidence
make
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 them independent and they start hunting
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part-time
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time
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 job to become responsible. They mostly involved in studies, social gathering as well as finding
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ob to get experience which will be beneficial for them in future. On another hand,
people
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 who believe
adult
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life
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bring
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 most of the happiness,
firstly
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 responsibility is a major factor. At the
adult
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 stage self-confidence and self-satisfaction are two important factors that bring happiness to a
person
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.
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Person
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A person
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 is able to support his family and parents and always well focused on his goal. When an
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person
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become
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 capable of fulfilling all needs of their families
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 he considered himself the happiest
person
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. In my opinion, both stages are different. It always
depend
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how
person
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tackle
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d
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ifferent situation and feel happy. A
teenager
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life
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 is not as complicated as
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 to the
adult
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person
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. When an
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person
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 become older at that
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life
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 show different situations. So it always
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 on priorities by which a
person
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 feel happy.
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