Some people think that the teenager’s years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There are different stages of
life
. Most
people
enjoyed as a
teenager
and many of the
people
likes
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their
adult
life
.
Teenager
life
is totally different from
adult
life
, both have different taste. Many
people
have
a
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the
an

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ssumption that
teenager
lives bring more happiness, on another hand the concept is totally different some
of
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apply

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p
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the

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eople consider
adult
life
happier. I will discuss both
point
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points

The singular countable noun point follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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of views and give my opinion. Those who believe teenage years are happiest for
people
because parents are always there for support, dependency
make
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makes

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them strong enough to deal with the difficulties example
,
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apply

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if a
teenager
get
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gets

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ill
then
a mother or father will support to get off from school or college. At the
time
of teenage the main focus is on studies and whenever possible they can spend
time
with friends and relatives. Socialization is more at the
time
of teenage years.
However
, when
teenager
become
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becomes

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an adolescent
then
they have
z
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the

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eal to achieve
g
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the
a

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oal. Confidence
make
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makes

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them independent and they start hunting
part
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part-time

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time
job to become responsible. They mostly involved in studies, social gathering as well as finding
j
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a

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ob to get experience which will be beneficial for them in future. On another hand,
people
who believe
adult
life
bring
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brings

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most of the happiness,
firstly
responsibility is a major factor. At the
adult
stage self-confidence and self-satisfaction are two important factors that bring happiness to a
person
.
Person
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A person
The person

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is able to support his family and parents and always well focused on his goal. When an
adult
person
become
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becomes

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capable of fulfilling all needs of their families
then
he considered himself the happiest
person
. In my opinion, both stages are different. It always
depend
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depends

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on

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how
person
tackle
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tackles

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d
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the

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ifferent situation and feel happy. A
teenager
life
is not as complicated as
compare
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compared

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to the
adult
person
. When an
adult
person
become older at that
time
life
show different situations. So it always
depend
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depends

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on priorities by which a
person
feel happy.
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