Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

In recent decades, many researchers have studied the importance of
group
-level cognition. Indeed, to my mind, there is
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convincing evidence that
group
activities improve the intelligence of
individuals
. In
this
essay, I shall examine how research in team-games and
study-groups
supports
this
view.
To begin
with, team-games clearly require
individuals
to perform a diverse range of rapid mental calculations.
This
is because, in a sporting context, players must predict and anticipate possible actions within tight time constraints.
For example
, a recent Cambridge study showed that soccer players can – within the span of seconds – calculate over a dozen different permutations that could result from a single
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.
Such
predictive powers clearly improve players’ mental abilities and result from activities performed in a
group
context.
Secondly
,
study-groups
enable
individuals
to obtain information that they could not acquire in isolation.
This
is because peer feedback allows
individuals
to refine their understanding of concepts and to
also
learn new information from other members in the
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group
.
For example
, a study by The British Institute for Learning found that, if
individuals
participated in
study-groups
, they had a far more objective and sophisticated understanding of a topic than learners who were not part of
study-groups
.
Therefore
, it is certainly the case that learning in a
group
improves an individual’s mental abilities. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that
group
activities improve
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ntellectual abilities. In the future, we will certainly see schools take greater measures to ensure that more
group
-level cognition occurs in the classroom.

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