Higher education could be funded in three ways. All costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or students paying all costs through a government loan. What are the advantages of these choices?

Since
university
funding
benefits
both
university
students
and
society
as a whole,
both
parties should bear some of the
cost
of
university
educations.
University
students
gain
both
personal and economic
benefits
by attending
university
;
however
,
society
also
benefits
by having a more educated population.
In addition
, it is important that all members of
society
have the opportunity to attend
university
regardless of wealth. In
this
essay
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the various models of funding for
university
places will be discussed. There is little doubt that people who attend
university
usually benefit
through
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higher salaries and greater opportunities. It is
therefore
reasonable that
society
expects
students
to make some contribution to the
cost
of their
education
.
However
, expecting
students
to fully fund their own
education
may cause
students
to avoid courses that lead to less well-paying jobs
such
as the sciences, nursing and teaching.
Society
as a whole
also
benefits
from having a more educated community and should support people who make an effort to become educated. It is
therefore
reasonable that governments
also
provide money for
university
places, particularly when the
cost
of doing a course or the return for
students
discourages them from completing a course
that is
needed by
society
. The funding model
that is
used for
university
placements is
also
very important as governments have a responsibility to provide an opportunity for all members of
society
to attend
university
. Deferred repayment of fees through
low
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cost
loans and the partial subsidising of
university
courses by government are effective methods of ensuring fairer access to
university
education
since they allow people to pay for their
education
when they are best able to afford to. In summary,
university
education
benefits
both
individuals and
society
and
both
governments and individuals who receive a
university
education
should make a contribution to the costs of tertiary
education
.
In addition
, it is important that appropriate loan schemes are in place to ensure that access to
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niversity is available to all members of
society
.

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