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Airlines are dropping their prices. Is it a positive or a negative development? Support your stand with examples.

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Airfares
 are falling. In my opinion,
this
 is a positive development because it allows more
people
 to
travel
 overseas, do business, learn new languages and discover interesting places. Low
airfares
 will definitely encourage more and more
people
 to
travel
 to exotic locations abroad. They get to discover new places and culture. The influx of
travelers
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also
 benefits the local economy. I feel that
travel
 has the potential to make the world a better place. When
people
travel
 to other places, they learn to respect various cultures, lifestyles and beliefs.
This
 helps them develop a better perspective on life and makes them more tolerant of differences. Falling
airfares
 have a very positive impact on the economy as well. It benefits exporters because they can take their products to foreign markets without having to spend a lot of money on transportation. It helps consumers as well. Indian textiles are more expensive in America than in India because the cost of transportation is
also
 added to the price. Cheaper air
travel
 will make imported goods more affordable. Cheap air
travel
also
 benefits international students and business
people
 who regularly
travel
 abroad. Perhaps the only downside is the impact on the environment. There are toxic pollutants in the plane exhaust and they can cause health problems and global warming. While these
are definitely causes
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 for concern, better technology may prevent these problems in the future. To conclude, falling
airfares
 benefit everyone who has to
travel
 long distances for business or recreational purposes. Increase in air
travel
also
 boosts the economy and creates jobs. I definitely feel that
this
 is a positive development.
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