You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 'Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.' To what extent do you agree? You should give reasons for your answers, and include ideas and example from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Tourism
allows
people
of different nationalities to be able to understand each other. In
this
essay, I disagree that
tourism
is a gateway to understanding each other. On the
one
hand, travelling to another
country
with a different, unique culture than yours enables
people
from different backgrounds to experience different ways of living;
thus
,
this
allows room for
one
to have an
open-mind
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, tolerance and understanding.
Moreover
,
one
of the many ways a diverse group of
people
to understand each other is through
language
.
Language
can pose as a gateway for learning the culture and the history of another
country
;
in addition
, it
also
allows different
people
from all walks of life to interact with
one
another, which creates a strong bond between
people
made from love and mutual respect.
On the other hand
,
people
do not
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t
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ravel to another
country
in order to understand and appreciate another culture and lifestyle. Some
people
go abroad for time off from work or on a family vacation;
thus
, rarely for a learning experience. That being said,
this
does not serve as a means of gaining
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nderstanding for
one
another.
Conversely
,
people
do not always study the
language
of a different
country
, rather they see English as an international
language
, which would not enable them to speak to locals.
As a result
,
tourism
does not always serve
people
as a way to understand each other. In conclusion, I feel that
although
ideally
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tourism
would serve as
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edium for tolerance,
but
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without seeing the importance to make sure
people
who are going abroad have an open-mind to understand and accept each other despite our differences,
tourism
would not be
this
force of good as it was intended.
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