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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. 'Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.' To what extent do you agree? You should give reasons for your answers, and include ideas and example from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Tourism
 allows
people
 of different nationalities to be able to understand each other. In
this
 essay, I disagree that
tourism
 is a gateway to understanding each other. On the
one
 hand, travelling to another
country
 with a different, unique culture than yours enables
people
 from different backgrounds to experience different ways of living;
thus
,
this
 allows room for
one
 to have an
open-mind
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, tolerance and understanding.
Moreover
,
one
 of the many ways a diverse group of
people
 to understand each other is through
language
.
Language
 can pose as a gateway for learning the culture and the history of another
country
;
in addition
, it
also
 allows different
people
 from all walks of life to interact with
one
 another, which creates a strong bond between
people
 made from love and mutual respect.
On the other hand
,
people
 do not
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t
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ravel to another
country
 in order to understand and appreciate another culture and lifestyle. Some
people
 go abroad for time off from work or on a family vacation;
thus
, rarely for a learning experience. That being said,
this
 does not serve as a means of gaining
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nderstanding for
one
 another.
Conversely
,
people
 do not always study the
language
 of a different
country
, rather they see English as an international
language
, which would not enable them to speak to locals.
As a result
,
tourism
 does not always serve
people
 as a way to understand each other. In conclusion, I feel that
although
 ideally
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tourism
 would serve as
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edium for tolerance,
but
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without seeing the importance to make sure
people
 who are going abroad have an open-mind to understand and accept each other despite our differences,
tourism
 would not be
this
 force of good as it was intended.
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