While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant example.

Recently, the process of recruiting is followed to select the best candidate to
work
in an organization. It depends on
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mployer which important characteristics they required in an employee. No doubt,
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ature of person should
also
be focused, but educational background and expertise
is
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are

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also
necessary to
work
efficiently in a particular industry. In my opinion, both components have equal importance. Every enterprise
have
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different priorities. If a
company
is very famous due to his good quality of
work
,
then
they will prefer
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an

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ctive employee to join their
company
. Those who have
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potential to show outstanding performance, they will get the chance to be a part of that
company
. A well-known enterprise
have
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has

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roper system to select
b
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est employees for them.
For example
, KM trading has
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an
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R department, they
receives
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receive

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resumes of the candidates through email, website or LinkedIn and
then
they process full information. CV of a person
give
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gives

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the idea about his profession, certifications and skills. The methodology to select
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a
the

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erfect employee who is free from any harmful act, well-mannered and hardworking get the opportunity to
work
.
Furthermore
, if employers only select peoples those who do not have enough knowledge of professional
work
, they cannot be able to perform any task due to lack of information and expertise.
For instance
, if there is
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ack of experience is seen in a candidate, but all other requirements are fulfilled,
then
a
company
arrange training facilities for the employees. To sum up, it is mandatory for organizations to hire those, who
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eligible to
work
in a professional environment. An enterprise should concern both areas to get
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higher achievement and to run their business smoothly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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