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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant example.

Recently, the process of recruiting is followed to select the best candidate to
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mployer which important characteristics they required in an employee. No doubt,
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ature of person should
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 be focused, but educational background and expertise
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 necessary to
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 efficiently in a particular industry. In my opinion, both components have equal importance. Every enterprise
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 different priorities. If a
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 is very famous due to his good quality of
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 they will prefer
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ctive employee to join their
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. Those who have
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 potential to show outstanding performance, they will get the chance to be a part of that
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. A well-known enterprise
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roper system to select
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est employees for them.
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R department, they
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 resumes of the candidates through email, website or LinkedIn and
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 they process full information. CV of a person
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 the idea about his profession, certifications and skills. The methodology to select
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erfect employee who is free from any harmful act, well-mannered and hardworking get the opportunity to
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, they cannot be able to perform any task due to lack of information and expertise.
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ack of experience is seen in a candidate, but all other requirements are fulfilled,
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 arrange training facilities for the employees. To sum up, it is mandatory for organizations to hire those, who
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eligible to
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 in a professional environment. An enterprise should concern both areas to get
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higher achievement and to run their business smoothly.

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