Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Purchasing items via
i
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nternet became the most likely method for different kind of
products
. I see that electronic shopping advantages are much more than its disadvantages.
First
of all, electronic shopping leads to lower prices than the regular way of shopping. The electronic
stores
save a lot of expenses that considered to be essentials in the physical
stores
.
For example
, the traditional
store
need
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to pay property's rent, labour salaries, governmental fees, constructions, decorations, and electricity bills.
However
, electronic
stores
do not require these expenses which resulted in decreasing the costs and offering lower prices to the end customer.
Secondly
, electronic shopping allows businesses to expand their targeted
customers
regardless
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their geographical location. While logistic networks became larger and packages delivery turned to be faster, electronic
stores
found a new method to increase their sales by reaching
customers
who can not reach the physical
store
.
For instance
, offering
products
through
e
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the
an

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lectronic
store
or social media allow more
customers
to purchase the
products
and increase businesses profits.
In addition
, electronic
stores
are accessible anytime which saves
customers
time and effort.
Customers
usually need to plan their shopping trips to be able to visit most of the targeted shops.
However
, through electronic shopping
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the
customers
can explore very different kind of
products
anytime anywhere regardless
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the physical location of the
store
. In conclusion, electronic shopping became very popular since it provides
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ariety of options to the customer with lower prices.
Furthermore
, it increases businesses revenue since it helps them to expand
customers
base.
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