Computers are an essential feature of modern education. Some people believe that certain subjects, such as mathematics, are better taught using computers. Others, however, think that there are aspects of education in which computer use is inadequate. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

Computers
are more essential
now days
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which
people
cannot leave without technology because they
needs
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everyday life to
use
to check bank account, retail or apply for jobs or studying. In my opinion
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all the ages using
computers
to
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for researching or
people
want to study in certain subjects like mathematics or travel and tourism. I think using
computers
is necessary because obviously
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you will need
for
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study not only in a certain subject but major subjects like engineering or English or business. I think that every
parts
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of your education need
computers
is
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not insufficient. I think
computers
is not only
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use
for
a
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apply

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certain subjects but you can
use
to contact with your friends and families or you can
use
to write your essays or you can
use
for to watch movies or buying things online in
ebay
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eBay

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or amazon. You can
use
for download
app
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like
d
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ictionary or playing games.
Also
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all the
ages
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pages

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using
computers
even
the
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elderly
people
, younger
people
and children. All the exams in
computers
now days
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nowadays

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in Maths, English and science which is the
computers
is the key feature in up to date education. The past papers in
computers
which is essential to practice before your real exams. (206 words)
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