Animals are becoming exist due to human activities on land and in sea. Why has this happen? What’s the solution?

It is true that the rapid development of different industries has destroyed wildlife habitat and a variety of animal
species
are on the verge of
extinction
.
This
is deeply
negetaive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
consequences due to human activities which has been placing profound impacts on animal life. There are several causes which lead to the
extinction
of
species
on land and in the sea.
Firstly
, what
has been doing
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has been done
on land is the area of forest was narrowed by the development of construction.
This
means that the natural habitat was damaged, no space for animal’s living, leading to the decrease of a numerous of
species
. It has
also
degraded ecosystems and threaten some
species
with
extinction
.
Secondly
, the industrialization
have
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has
serious impacts, causing water pollution and
extinction
of
species
.
Accept space
.
heavy
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Heavy
industries
such
as steel factories, discharged and dumped tons of waste into the sea without a discharge permit, polluted the ocean and posed
threat
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a threat
threats
to the balance of
marine ecosystem
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marine ecosystems
the marine ecosystem
.
Accept space
.
For
instances
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instance
, tons of marine animals
was killed
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were killed
and died by untreated sewage from
Fomosa
an island in southeastern Asia 100 miles off the coast of mainland China in the South China Sea
Formosa
steel factory in Quang Tri province in Viet Nam. To prevent the
extinction
of animal, there are several measures which can be taken to solve these issues. One of
this
could be that protecting and restoring the natural environment on which many endangered
species
depend for their survival.
In particular
, experts
on
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in
construction field should develop their projects vertically
instead
of horizontally and do not encroach on forest land.
Furthermore
, national and local authorities must introduce more campaigns to raise public awareness about the role of wildlife in human life.
Besides
, national governments must enact strict law to punish and prevent illegal activities which destroy and threaten natural environment,
for example
animal traffickers. In conclusion, the
extinction
of
species
result
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results
in many issues which can call for possible solutions to be adopted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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