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Fast food is a part of life in some places. Some people think that this has bad effects on lifestyles and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is seen that in many cities around the world, nowadays, junk
food
 or street
food
 has become an integral part of the daily
lives
Suggestion
life
 of people.
This
 trend,
however
, has been questioned by some for having negative impacts on public
health
 and well-being. I firmly agree with
this
 claim as
this
 fast
food
 trend has been seen bringing detrimental effects on people
,
Accept space
,
especially children and youngsters. One of the prominent reasons to condemn the outside
food
 is the way it is being prepared and served in a very unhealthy environment. Because of
this
plural of "this"
these
mal practices
professional wrongdoing that results in injury or damage
malpractices
, those who eat junk
food
 put their
health
 at risk. It has been reported time and again in various research papers that
such
 foods are prepared by adding
unhygienic
 materials to enhance
flavors
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavours
 and if eaten regularly, people would fall ill
consequently
. The obesity data that has come up
the highest
Suggestion
higher
 in
this
 year in the USA where fast-
food
 culture has ubiquitously accepted, which is an alarming situation. Another reason behind supporting the claim of negative effects is the way it has made people’s routine lives disturbed.
In other words
, owing to the readily available fast-
food
, many people tend to skip the home-made
food
 which is supposed to be healthier. Those who have fast-
food
 items in their daily routines are highly likely to take more oil, sugar and carbohydrates which in turn produce bad cholesterol. Ultimately, certain diseases like hypertension and diabetes have become common among the people, which was not the case in past generations. Henceforth, it can be strongly conveyed that fast
food
 varieties are prone to increase the
health
 hazards. Due to its preparation methods and its role in people’s routine, fast
food
 culture has deteriorated public
health
 gradually.
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