Children engaged in sport are often overloaded with physical activity or get serious traumas. What are the main reasons of this? What solutions can you suggest?

There
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are
is
an increasing
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number
numbers
of young people that get serious physical or
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psychological
psycological
injuries due to sports. It is
therefore
agreed that high-intensity training for sports at
such
a young age can
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present
presents
the children a lot of disadvantages, especially for their future
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carrier
careers
career
carrer
or physical development.
Firstly
,
this
essay will look at what causes kids to suffer
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these injuries
this injury
this injuries
at a high rate, and
secondly
, what can be
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done
made
to solve
this
issue. Nowadays, there
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is
are
a lot of young athletes than dream to become future starts in the sports they practice. Due to
this
, they tend to over-
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intensify
intesify
their training sessions with their coaches or clubs, leading to early injuries or mental problems regarding stress.
Furthermore
, children are asked to do well at school at the same time, and are often not able to handle so much work.
For instance
, in a poll made by the government of the city of Hamburg, in Germany, primary and secondary school students that train 15 or more hours per week tend to have problems to pass school exams and are not motivated with most of the subjects. The solutions to
this
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problem
problematic
cannot be done entirely be the person itself, as most of the times he or she is not aware of the situation that they are involved.
Moreover
, a closer look needs to be done by the coaches or clubs, which should considerate the
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effectiveness
efectiveness
of the training as a more important factor for the child´s development than the
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amount
amounts
ammount
of time spent on it.
For example
, many soccer academies in Germany developed a system, in which the kids who train to become
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professional
professioonal
players have a limited hours in the week to train, and are expected to be educated by the clubs
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themselves
theirselves
. In conclusion, some changes need to be done in the training sessions for young athletes to prevent bad situation, which could eventually lead to a failure in the kid´s career. A good way to start doing it is by informing about the consequences of these bad habits and promoting solutions needed
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for
to
the formative clubs.

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