In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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Modern life has been changing a lot and so are humans! Today, more and more talents are recognized due to an attitude ‘’anyone can do’’ in

arts

Suggestion

the arts

However

, not all of them are really

genuine yet

Suggestion

genuine, yet

still become rich and famous. I disagree that people stop appreciating geniuses as well as their works.

First

of all is about an attitude of ‘’anyone can do’’, which particularly happens in the musical industry. Nowadays, it is easy for people to record and upload their

music

to the social media. Now, they just need to make sure that

the songs are following

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the following songs are

the trend, and they can easily become famous even if they are not talented at all.

In addition

, recording by themselves without any help from other musicians or pay for the studio

also

one

of the things that could not have been done in the past.

Secondly

, becoming famous from the social media is

one

of the shortest ways to become rich and famous. There are a plenty of websites or apps that allow people to post without charge

such

as YouTube, Facebook or Twitter.

Those

Suggestion

These

programs

also

allow people to earn money back. Some of my friends, they can earn quite a lot of money from YouTube at the end of the day base on the views. Sharing is not a problem nowadays. It is very easy to spread

one

or two videos from people to people and

country

. Enhance, people have more chances to become famous not only in their

country

but

also

another

country

Thirdly

, how about the truly gifted people? In fact, the number of famous gifted people is

decline

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declining

nowadays. In my view, I think they are losing the trend in

art

For example

, in the

music

industry, especially young people, they can easily love, like and share

one

music

video if it is an EDM or

ballad

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a ballad

. Why? It is because EDM and ballad is now trending all over the world.

Instead

of producing the

music

which follows the trend, gifted people produce opera, which attracts a small group of people. So there is less chance for them to become famous. Yes, modern life gives us more opportunities to become famous. In fact, there are many television stars who cannot act or singer whose voice sounds bad, but they still can become famous and some are celebrities. The key to become popular is that they dare to do and dare to change. Long time ago,

art

was defined as a magical thing, because people doing

art

were really creative and they could do something special which the others could not. So it is true to say ‘’anyone can do’’ attitude is common in

art

However

, in my opinion, it is not

matter

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a matter

which period are we staying, geniuses are always appreciated and having value. In my view, the value of a person is defined by their morals and attitudes

instead

of how famous they are.

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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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