In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

Modern life has been changing a lot and so are humans! Today, more and more talents are recognized due to an attitude ‘’anyone can do’’ in
arts
Suggestion
the arts
.
However
, not all of them are really
genuine yet
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genuine, yet
still become rich and famous. I disagree that people stop appreciating geniuses as well as their works.
First
of all is about an attitude of ‘’anyone can do’’, which particularly happens in the musical industry. Nowadays, it is easy for people to record and upload their
music
to the social media. Now, they just need to make sure that
the songs are following
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the following songs are
the trend, and they can easily become famous even if they are not talented at all.
In addition
, recording by themselves without any help from other musicians or pay for the studio
also
is
one
of the things that could not have been done in the past.
Secondly
, becoming famous from the social media is
one
of the shortest ways to become rich and famous. There are a plenty of websites or apps that allow people to post without charge
such
as YouTube, Facebook or Twitter.
Those
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These
programs
also
allow people to earn money back. Some of my friends, they can earn quite a lot of money from YouTube at the end of the day base on the views. Sharing is not a problem nowadays. It is very easy to spread
one
or two videos from people to people and
country
to
country
. Enhance, people have more chances to become famous not only in their
country
but
also
another
country
.
Thirdly
, how about the truly gifted people? In fact, the number of famous gifted people is
decline
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declining
nowadays. In my view, I think they are losing the trend in
art
.
For example
, in the
music
industry, especially young people, they can easily love, like and share
one
music
video if it is an EDM or
ballad
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a ballad
. Why? It is because EDM and ballad is now trending all over the world.
Instead
of producing the
music
which follows the trend, gifted people produce opera, which attracts a small group of people. So there is less chance for them to become famous. Yes, modern life gives us more opportunities to become famous. In fact, there are many television stars who cannot act or singer whose voice sounds bad, but they still can become famous and some are celebrities. The key to become popular is that they dare to do and dare to change. Long time ago,
art
was defined as a magical thing, because people doing
art
were really creative and they could do something special which the others could not. So it is true to say ‘’anyone can do’’ attitude is common in
art
.
However
, in my opinion, it is not
matter
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a matter
which period are we staying, geniuses are always appreciated and having value. In my view, the value of a person is defined by their morals and attitudes
instead
of how famous they are.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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