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Many people now live in societies where consumer goods have become cheap. Do advantages outweigh disadvanatges?

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It is true that many people now live in societies where consumer commodities have become reasonably priced while
this
 may have several drawbacks, I believe that overall the benefits are more significant. There are several disadvantages of affordably priced goods.
Firstly
, cheap commodities
are
Suggestion
is
 usually shoddy products. Manufactures may cut corners and resort to cheap materials in order to improve their profits.
This
 can make products fall apart after a short period of time.
Hence
, a myriad of products can be an utter waste of money of people.
Secondly
, the rise of the purchaser society is a major cause of exacerbating environmental problems. Systems of factories have to operate full capacity in these products and packaging.
This
 can increase exhaust emissions as well as to contribute dramatically to environmental problems
such
 as global warming and greenhouse effects. Despite the negative effects mentioned above, I contend that the positive consequences of reasonably priced commodities are greater. Primarily, purchasers can buy many more goods than before.
This
 can create jobs for the public and alleviate the rate of unemployment as manufactures produce many distinct goods.
when
Suggestion
When
 employers are a lucrative income, they can easily cover their bills
such
 as electricity and accommodation.
Therefore
, they can improve standards of living.
In addition
, the government can collect enormous taxes. When firms obtain massive profits, they have to pay taxes for the government and the government budget can drastically augment. In conclusion,
although
 cheap goods have several drawbacks, I believe that reasonable commodities are more likely to have harm impacts on
life
Suggestion
the life
lives
 of many people in societies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass production
  • globalization
  • consumer goods
  • quality of life
  • overconsumption
  • environmental degradation
  • local economies
  • unethical labor practices
  • throwaway culture
  • materialistic values
  • economic growth
  • national security
  • economic autonomy
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