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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertising from competing companies. To what extent do

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It is said that nowadays, a large number of companies use advertisements as
such
 a great impact to the
consumer
. I believe that
consumer
 fed up with daily advertising and marketing techniques.
Therefore
, they need to be
ensured
react verbally
answered
 about their own wellbeing from the advertisements..............................................................................................................Promotion has become the multibillion dollar industry and companies use
this
 type of action to push
consumer
 purchase their products and services. Despite of having a great deal of benefits, advertisements
also
 have negative influences which leads to
consumer
' wrong choices.
For example
, promotions on several social
network
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networks
 can push consumers to buy their products which lead people to make
impulsive purchase
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impulsive purchases
an impulsive purchase
.
Also
, many companies
uses
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use
 sexual or subliminal
.
Accept space
.
contents
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Contents
 to attract
consumer
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consumers
the consumer
 to buy their products and services due to relaxed advertising law. In fact,
this
 is
such
 a dangerous actions of them, if the children see those types of promotions, they will be influenced on their thoughts and mind In conclusion, for these, and many other reasons, I believe that Governments and other organisations need to restrict how companies try to promote their products and services in order to protect innocent consumers.....................................................
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