It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Economic scientist expected some countries are witnessing the increase of the older people in their inhabitants. I believe,

this

growth would negatively affect to the economics and other aspects of a

country

. On the one hand, despite the dedication of the older generation to the social development and our peace generally, it

also

leads to a higher burden to the government because of the rising number of the elders.

Firstly

, the rapid aging speed of a

country

would

seriously influence to

Suggestion

seriously influence

the

labor

a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages

labour

age of a community.

Consequently

, there is a lack of skilled employees under working condition, leading to the stagnant integration to globalization as well as decreasing GDP growth widely.

Secondly

, the various subsidiaries older people consist of welfare, insurance and medical fee would cause some certain deficit to the government fund.

For instance

, Korea is facing with the negative shortage of label forces working in factories, manufactures and offices because of the

dramatical

suitable to or characteristic of drama

dramatic

increase of the elders in remote areas while the birth rate is extremely low.

On the other hand

, it is obviously beneficial to the

country

if the younger rate is standing as the highest in age chart. Rather than that, these youngsters are not only contributing to the enrich and diversified skilled workers over the

field but

Accept comma addition

field, but

also

boosting the growth of

economics

Suggestion

economic

and educations.

Moreover

, a huge number of

workforces

Suggestion

the workforces

are

dedicating

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dedicated

such

helpfully

communitive

a group of people living in a particular local area

community

campaigns, aiming to raise awareness among the public.

Such

activities as cleaning the beaches, rivers and canals or educating for poor children in mountainside which the older persons find them difficult to contribute because of

health condition

Suggestion

a health condition

. In conclusion, it is true to respect our grandparent’s generation thank to their attempts over the years,

however

, the

youngers

used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father

younger

youngest

would be the future generation and inherit to continue their missions in promoting their own

country

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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties having enough sleep what are problems caused by lack of sleep? what can be done about this lack of sleep?

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