IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#bar #students #university #subjects #summarise #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart provides information about
amount
Add an article
the amount
show examples
 of students who chose university
subjects
Use synonyms
 in 2005. The chart groups students
according to
Linking Words
subjects
Use synonyms
 and divides these
subjects
Use synonyms
 groups into
male
Add an article
a male
the male
show examples
 and female
category
Fix the agreement mistake
categories
show examples
. It is evident that there are some foolproof differences
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
subjects
Use synonyms
 chosen between
two
Correct article usage
the two
show examples
 genders. The number of
female
Change to a plural noun
females
show examples
 who chose their
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
show examples
subjects
Use synonyms
 ranged from the highest number of just under 25
Use synonyms
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
 to the lowest number of just under 5
Use synonyms
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
, a difference of around 20
Use synonyms
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
.
Female
Fix the agreement mistake
Females
show examples
 chose most in social sciences,
languages
Correct word choice
and languages
show examples
while
Linking Words
 their least
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
show examples
 choice was in Mathematics. There was a significant difference between the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of males who chose
subjects
Use synonyms
 at University. Males are more interested in Sciences, Mathematics and Literature than Females. The most popular
subject
Use synonyms
 chosen by
Add an article
a male
the male
show examples
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
 is sciences with around over 20
Use synonyms
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
. With approximately 20
Use synonyms
thousands
Correct your spelling
thousand
show examples
 fewer, languages
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 the
subject
Use synonyms
had
Correct pronoun usage
that had
show examples
 the lowest choice by
male
Add an article
a male
show examples
student
Fix the agreement mistake
students
show examples
.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
, languages
wa
Correct your spelling
was
also
Linking Words
 the
subject
Use synonyms
had
Correct pronoun usage
that had
show examples
 the biggest difference between males and females with around over 15
Use synonyms
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
show examples
.
Humanrities
Correct your spelling
Humanities
 was only the
subject
Use synonyms
had
Correct pronoun usage
who had
show examples
similar
Add an article
the similar
a similar
show examples
 figure of choice with over 10 thousand of both.
Submitted by Thanh on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, thousands, subject with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: