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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the question of whether advertisement’s power drives consumption of goods or
not have
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not, have
 been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
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 in many cases, consumerism is reliant on advertising, other factors will justify there. One the one hand, it is undeniable that the power of advertising in maximizing the profit of companies by manipulating us is apparent.
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, since the involvement of celebrities and their own huge potential influence
in
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of
 advertising, certain products are endorsed, contributing to the excessive consumption of customers. In fact, a popular
personality
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person
 has the ability to transfer their image to a specific product
that is
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 advertised, which leads to gaining credibility
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by
 using products from
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the myriad
 of fans.
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, on the grounds that manufacturers use adverts as the main drive which evokes the customer’s curiosity.
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 means that while consumers are imprinted on their mind by glamorous pictures and jingle as well as exaggeration and promise about the benefits of products, the plethora of goods will be consumed on a sudden impulse.
On the other hand
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, people tend to buy something unnecessary or even
unaffordable
impossible to avoid or evade
unavoidable
.
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, by updating latest products as
smartphone
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smart phone
, watches, cars in order to flaunt wealth, addicted buyers could max cut their credit cards. In fact, a throw-away culture can generate plenty of plastic wastes in
society
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a society
 which is detrimental to the environment as these refuse takes hundreds of years to decompose.
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, apart from advertising, there are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 factors contribute to
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 trend
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 as the higher standard of living, mass production as a wide range of goods but reasonable prices, or overpopulation which make consumers buy goods excessively. In conclusion, while enhancing goods consumption
reflect
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reflects
 the power of advertisement in many situations, the role of other factors are far more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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