Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

Many thinking
of
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about
work
on
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in
the community service as a volunteer that should be forced and must be carried out in high school programmers.
Although
being a volunteer ought to be encourages, I do not agree that we should perform it as a mandatory part of high school programmers. Most teenagers feel
stresses
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stressed
stress
from their studies already. And so, they don’t need to add more responsibility of working the unpaid community service in their free time. Young people
have been learning
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are learning
as a full-time job in order to prepare their later lives: working out for their university entrance examination, their final exam or paying attention
on
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to
the major knowledge which is they received in class
everyday
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every day
.
Besides
, we might suggestions it as good actives in young
childrens’
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children’s
children
vacation without compulsory. On the other hands, I do not think that
society
will have a positive change from students to do unpaid work. As we know, the main proposed idea that helping the
society
is one of ways to practice basis skills for the
children which
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children, which
is
help
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helping
them to be mature enough in their life.
Likewise
,
this
can turn shy children into positive members.
Additionally
, let’s make them decide
instead
of obliging students
.
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.
Indeed that
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Indeed, that
will only lead to resentment amongst young children and that could be considered that we are trying to against the values of free and break the fair
society
what the human are going to turn towards. In conclusion, I think
there are more other
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there are other more
efficient methods to improve the
society
without making it compulsory.

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