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Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is argued that well-known people’s involvement in global
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 organizations attracts the attention of the community. While some people suppose that their participation may downplay the significance of problems, I would argue that
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 trend could bring about enormous and positive changes to society. On the one hand, famous people can lessen the importance of problems. One reason is that most people often consider the main purpose of celebrities’ support as a way to enhance their reputations. In an effort to attract the attention of society, a number of important people try to be involved in as many volunteer projects as possible without any particular passion or interest in those.
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, the association with celebrities may trivialize the serious work of international
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 organizations since the focus of the public may be shifted away from
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 endeavour to the fame and public image of the celebrity concerned.
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, we sometimes have to question their motives for involvement.
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, I strongly believe that celebrities can bring meaningful changes to social activities.
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, they have a huge number of fans who are inspired by their actions.
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, when My Tam- a Vietnamese legendary singer - took part in a project to help underprivileged children in mountainous areas, thousands of youngsters from her fan clubs joined in
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 project by donating money and working as volunteers thanks
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, celebrities are often trusted by both local and international communities, which may lead to success in raising the profile of
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 organizations.
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,
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 more people learn about projects and donate money or volunteer to help either
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practical
 or in fund-raising. In conclusion,
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 there are some drawbacks to celebrity participation in international
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 organizations, it seems to me that it is more advantageous for the community that they take part in voluntary activities

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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