International tourism is the world’s biggest industry. Unfortunately, this trend often causes tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Agree or disagree

I a
wworld
everything that exists anywhere
world
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with far more modernized than ever before international tourism has
became
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become
the most prominent sector in
industry
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the industry
. While there are several
benificial
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benefits
beneficial
for
this
trend, I believe that
this
trend
could still brings
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could still bring
drawbacks. It is clear that foreign tourists bring some advantages for local people.
This
is due to the fact that oversea tourists would create job opportunities for the local as well as directly contribute to
thier
of them or themselves
their
income via
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
, food and transportation.
As a result
, local people could improve standard livings, spending more money for their health and educating their children in a better way.
However
, I believe
this
to be a very short-sighted view. It is evidence that tourists coming from other nations would destroy biodiversity as well as residential areas. To be more precise, investors could cut down
trees even
Accept comma addition
trees, even
forest to build attractive areas which captivate tourists to raise income for it. It is evidence that foreign visitors could bring a mix of civilisations.
This
is simply because
simultanously
at the same instant
simultaneously
people become easier to approach new
culture
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cultural
values coming from
other countries in over
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other countries over
the world.
Consequently
, local would lost traditional values as well as unique cultures remained thousand years. What is more, the local face with contamination issues produced by
tourists
someone who theorizes (especially in science or art)
theorists
such
as air or noise
pullutions
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
. Because travellers could use mean of transportations to move all of attractive
destinationand
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destination and
speak with any
volumn
a line of units following one after another
column
volume
they want.
This
would lead to people could easier to get diseases related to lung or mental illnesses. In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are some merits from international tourists in
tourism industry
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the tourism industry
. I
would be believe
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would believe
that the phenomenon
also
brings some demerits.

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