A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#person’s #status #possessions #values #honor #kindness #trust

In the light of technological development and modern society, human

are becoming

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is becoming

more and more practical.

As a result

, the public

remain

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remains

divided on how to measure a person’s quality. Some people believe that today

such

thing is likely to be judged by realistic achievements,

instead

of personalities. While

this

may be true to some extent, I would argue that there is a more optimal approach. It is understandable why people advocate appreciating one’s worth based on power and wealth. The key rationale is that in

this

highly competing world, a person has to be talented and becomes one of the elite few to gain social status and richness.

However

this

judgement is flawed. Because it may encourage

emotionless

lifestyles, which has

negative bearing

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a negative bearing

on moral aspects of society. Above-mentioned approach aside, I strongly believe that a person’s personality has to be taken into consideration. As

such

values have their deep roots in a nation’s culture and have even contributed to

it’s

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

history.

In addition

, these personal

qualitites

an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone

qualities

are the foundation of trust and share in human’s daily life. My hometown perfectly

examplifies

be characteristic of

exemplifies

this

situation. It is just a

transquil

(of a body of water) free from disturbance by heavy waves

tranquil

small town on the outskirts of Hanoi, where the economics is not so developed. As people are not busy chasing practical value, the

neighbors

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbours

live in harmony together, which is definitely not seen frequently in the city central. In conclusion, while judging a person based on his measurable achievements is partly valid, I am of the opinion that his personality should

also

be regarded as

key value

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the key value

a key value

key values

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Topic Vocabulary:

Materialism
Social status
Old-fashioned values
Honor
Kindness
Integrity
Consumerism
Superficiality
Ephemeral
Philanthropy
Prosperity
Altruism
Narcissism
Humility
Empathy
Ethics
Moral compass
Minimalist
Contentment
Material possessions
Status symbol
Wealth disparity
Moral bankruptcy

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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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discuss whether the advantage of nuclear energy outweigh the potential risks and environmental concerns.

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