Some people believe that young people benefit from working while studing at schools and universities. Other think that young people will achieve more by focusing on their studies. Discuss both these viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

The debate, whether studies and work at
same time
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the same time
could be advantageous for university students or not is trending a lot these days. Many believe it would be
helpful but
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helpful, but
some people claims focusing on studies is much more beneficial.
This
essay will emphasize on why the former statement outweighs the latter one and is the best option among the two. Ample number of students go abroad for
studiesfor
Suggestion
studies for
their career prospects with limited financial support. They witness many circumstances where they are trapped for
budget
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a budget
. Apart from college fee, food expenses, daily travelling and fitness there
are
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is
lot
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a lot
of
situationswhere
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situations where
money is needed. An unlikely health problem, an accident, additional study materials, practice books, workshops and projects during the course require money.
Such
expenses can not be planned exactly.
Thus
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
feel
supporting
Suggestion
supported
the working student culture as
this
enables them to be self dependent and handle the situation comprehensively. While, if you look at the other side of
this
, many
insists
Suggestion
insist
to focus on only studies rather than doing a job to cope up with financial expenses at
same time
Suggestion
the same time
.
This
will absolutely help students to achieve higher grades in their
academics but
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academics, but
it creates a loophole in terms of organizational working culture experience which they have to go through in
future
Suggestion
the future
. The students can get a fair idea of financial management and understand and analyse the
situationthat
Suggestion
situation that
can ultimately help them with their studies as well.
For example
, there are many students who are
enlorred
disregarded
ignored
in business management or financial management courses. Working along with studies will definitely add value to their subject. Recapitulating the statement that whether working and
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
are
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is
complementry
of words or propositions so related that each is the negation of the other
complementary
complimentary
or not,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have a biased opinion of supporting the
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
and working culture rather than being only study oriented. It has numerous positive outcomes if
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
in a right way.

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