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Some people feel that entertainer (I.e film stars pop musicians and sports stars )are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree . Which are the types of jobs should be highly paid.

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Entertainment industry
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The entertainment industry
 is considered as a highly paid industry in all over the
world
Accept comma addition
world, however
however
 it is a becoming eye-catching topic to discuss whether it is economically acceptable or not. Some people believe entertainer like film stars, pop musicians, sports starts are paid higher than other occupations. As long as
amount
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an amount
 of reward for an effort is concerned and
such
 entertainers deserve a handsome money. They have a distinct
talents
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talent
 and skills and they execute extra efforts and practice to make
theirselves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 eligible for entering into
entertainment world
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the entertainment world
. In some case, like Hollywood actors/actress put their life at risk in performing an extra-ordinary role or play. Whereas, some sports persons
also
 have
greater chance
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a greater chance
 of on-field injuries. But,
amount
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the amount
 of salary in other jobs
do not justify
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does not justify
this
 point.
Well balanced
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The well balanced country
country
 is
also
 in need of other quality services from doctors, defence entity, teachers etc. Military group is providing the protection shield to
country
 against the danger of anti-social activities for peaceful environment. They should be paid comparatively high for their involvement in
country
's safety.
Moreover
,
country
's education system plays major role in
successful
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successful countries
a successful country
country
. Rather spending too much money behind entertainment industry starts, it should be invested in paying enough
to
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for
 teachers and in developing resources for
bright future
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the bright future
 of
nation
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the nation
a nation
. All in all, I agree
instead
 paying too much to
entertainer
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entertain
, some other types of job like military service, teachers should be paid highly too.
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