Is Education the only critical Factor to the Development of a Country?
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said
Chitra Subramanian. Suggestion
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also
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conditions
Initially
, what will happen if there is a big gap between the balance of poor living
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condition
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education
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system
? Children, who come from the remote areas have to
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fight
with many issues while they are on their miserably hard way coming to Suggestion
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school
. Take
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students
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example
, they have to cross the
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schoolbags
and uniforms Suggestion
school bags
into
plastic bags so as to reach
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in
the
other side every day, which is the main reason for almost students there drop out of
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their
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the student left school
school
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because
they are not able to pay the tuition fees; especially in Vietnam, there does not
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education
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not
flourish as predicted. There will have more uneducated people, who cannot join in any
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soft
skills, or even hard skills training; Almost of them are unemployed, which is Suggestion
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the high
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higher
rate
for crimes from all over the world.
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nation
cannot flourish even when it has the most modern teaching program. Take Pakistan
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also use
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country
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, try to imagine how our kids can pay all their attention to study, if there are Linking Words
bunch
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of
violent threats.
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least
once, while 71 percent of students have been affected by Suggestion
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school violence in
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school violence
the
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last
six months.” According to a survey in Vietnam
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other countries.
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Furthermore
, another hard-solving problem is that there still has many kidnaps, which
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worried
parents a lot. The kidnappers take students to their private place by magic skills,
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and
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then
they make a phone call to parents to tell them give a big amount of money, or
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their
children will die. The authorities should put Suggestion
Their
necessary measures
in place to secure
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the necessary measures
schools
across the Suggestion
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country
in view of the emerging security challenges.
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Finally
, gender equality, religion, and living areas are extremely useful to go along
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with
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one
hand, the discrimination
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between
boys and girls in schools became a highlight issue around the 19th to the 20th
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century
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which
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they
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US
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the US
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, in many developing
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countries
, homosexual people still have to face with a lot of harassments, and
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discriminations
. It is not equal for them because every person on Suggestion
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this
planet has the right
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to
live, go to Suggestion
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school
, and grow up. Governments should have more consideration about
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the
rights for LGBT to be themselves like other people.
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another hand
, the discrimination among religions Suggestion
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other hand
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also needs
taking
into a
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example
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of
different beliefs. Suggestion
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students
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the students
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school
,
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who
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accidentally?
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also
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one
of the main factors making
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war
. Most people from the urban do not like people, who come from the Suggestion
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suburban
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suburbs
because
they think that they have no similarities.
"When we started out we had a few whites in our area, but within a few years they
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all
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All
,
" said Lewis Anderson.
"For us African Americans when we see a Accept space
,
group
of white people move to the
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neighborhood
we think that's good, we're cool with that. But for many white
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Neighbourhood
Neighborhood
families
that's not the case - they start to get discouraged, they start to worry about
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Families
the
property value and leave."
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do
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with
another. Kids Suggestion
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example
, some African students
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only
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group
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this
case, Raising citizen awareness is the thing Linking Words
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one
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country
to put it on top.
To conclude, three above-mentioned aspects represent for all of the issues, which
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need
considering together by the government in order to reinforce the Suggestion
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country
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Education
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is
an extremely important and necessary for Suggestion
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one
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country
to strengthen it as much as
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possible
, but it has to go along with other aspects. “Together we can change the world”. If
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the
authority is Suggestion
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unaffordable
to clarify these problems, there will come about impossible to avoid or evade
unavoidable
some
in the near future
soon
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situations in the future.Suggestion
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