Some people say the Olympics Games are not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

Every four
year
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years
, the whole world stops to watch, celebrate and participate in
international sporting event
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the international sporting event
an international sporting event
called
Olympics
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the Olympics
.
Handful
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A handful
of people
believe
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believes
these global sporting events are not adding value in
21st century
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the 21st century
.
On the contrary
, I believe, that these games have more merits than demerits, as they support in releasing international tensions, promote tourism and cultural exchange. To embark on, during
Olympic games
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the Olympic games
, participants and athletes from various countries come together to a common platform and helps releasing international tension between nations, as they compete with each other in a healthy and non-violent environment.
Moreover
, world leaders have an eye on these global competitions and cross path with other leaders to restore collaboration, and
to build
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build
a cohesive environment with nations to flourish international traders. As per a recent survey, 73% of the countries participating in Olympics tend to incline to collaborate and establish inter-country trade treaty for business.
Further
to accord, episodes and occasions
such
as Olympics help grow tourism
for
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in
the hosting country that results in monetary contribution to the nation, which can be channelized for the development and building facilities for
citizen
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citizens
the citizen
. During
Olympics
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the Olympics
, people from assorted culture, geographies and races come together, leading to enhance cultural exchange between nations. Citizen from various
nation
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nations
come together, end up rooting themselves with people from hosting country, concluding a strong social bond with each other.
Additionally
, international sporting events
has been known
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have been known
for boosting the societal growth people, as hospitality and
unique cultural experience
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a unique cultural experience
latches on to people for
exceptionally long time
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an exceptionally long time
. In summary, Olympic games and other global sporting events have more benefits than its disadvantage as they bring
nation
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nations
the nation
together to support, cheer and celebrate their athletic representatives, and
to build
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build
a strong cultural and economic relation with other participating countries.

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