Some people say that using smartphones should be banned in most schools. Do you agree or disagree with that?

Nowadays, We have witnessed so
variety
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varied
the bombing of technology so the people have many chances to access to any smart
devices
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devices, for
for example
iPad, google glasses, laptop,
smartwatch
and typical is
smartphone
...
thus some
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Thus, some
Thus some
student
abuse it in
school
and it is said that
smartphone
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a smartphone
should be banned in
school
. In my opinion, the mobile phone should be prohibited in educational places. I think it brings to students more harmful things than benefits for learning which is distractions in the classroom, unsociable and
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a light informal meal
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in relationships with their friends
First
of all, it is undoubted that the
smartphone
makes people have more and more gap in relationships, mostly in friendship. I believe that when they have in hand a
smartphone which
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smartphone, which
smart phone which
is so convenient for lifting up their mood and unwind after long
school
time, certainly they will look intently at their
smartphone
and have a little chit-chat with someone by internet so it is the leading justification for less interaction with their friend. If I must opt between
smartphone
and outing with my friend when I am not on the go, maybe I will go to for my
smartphone
:)) because I just lay down in my bedroom and have no tiredness. The
secondly
obvious justification is that when they have the
smartphone
, they will be interrupted in learning because they all away think about the recreational game, apps for entertainment...
As a result
, they won't get any scores with flying colours. Another compelling reason for the idea is that they won't be alert to study anything Off the top of my head, the
smartphone
should be banned in
school but
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school, but
in some cases, the smart devices still help them study effectively and provide them with a golden environment to develop logical thinking and study any subject easily...If they use it reasonably It is undeniable that smartphones and some smart devices support the
student
to acquire knowledge more quickly than
traditional way
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the traditional way
and I think it is a new learning method helped studier in learning, it promotes the memory of
student
besides they
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besides, they
not only know more about
information
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the information
that they are learning by ebook but
also
they can track the progress of the lesson smoothly without textbook
moreover
allowing
student
to expand learning outside of the classroom.
Furthermore
, It prepares students for future work. Working with mobile devices will not only be a part of their everyday lives as adults, but it will
also
be a vital part of many career paths as well as knowing how to appropriately use mobile devices is an important aspect in
this
increasingly connected world and workforce.
Finally
, The
smartphone
gives
student
up-to-date learning,
in other words
, the old days of looking for information in encyclopedias are long
gone
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gone, therefore
therefore
having mobile devices in the classroom allows students instant access to the latest news, information, statistics, etc. Virtually every question they have is at their fingertips, keeping them connected with what’s going on around them and ensuring they are always well informed with the most up-to-date data in learning. To summarize, the
smartphone
supports them so numerous in training intelligence.
Nevertheless
, they
also
cause various problems in learning, especially addicted to the internet,
facebook
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Facebook
,...
or
introduces an alternative
Or
some decreases in educating, for
this
reason, it is said to bạn at educational accommodations. I advise that they should use them
logically and efficiently to
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logically and efficiently
get an immeasurable advantage in learning.

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