It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct. So we should not try to prevent this from happening. Agree or disagree

Thesedays
Suggestion
These days
, a lot of wildlife animals vanish throughout the world. There is an idea that it is
traordinary
phenomenon
Accept comma addition
phenomenon, then
then
people should follow
nature
Suggestion
naturally
. I totally disagree with
this
it
it is
it's
because human is a great factor that affects many
species
in both directly and
in directly
not in a forthright manner
indirectly
.
Appearently
Suggestion
Apparently
, people
is
Suggestion
are
have been
the main reason why many animals turn out extinct. From the past until now, creatures
is
Suggestion
are
main resource to supply for meal of human. In fact, we are exploiting animal's meat in daily life all over the world from cattle like goats, pigs and chickens to wildlife animals
such
as birds, marine's fish and rabbits.
Furthermore
, there are still many use purposes of animals that people could work
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
normal lives like using parts of their body for decoration
, controling like
Suggestion
, like controlling
, controlling like
pet
Suggestion
a pet
pets
or serving medicine.
Therefore
,
that is
not
natural process
Suggestion
a natural process
with major animals.
Additionally
, because of many
human's
Suggestion
human
activities that might push enormous animals to the edge of
extinct
Suggestion
extinction
.
Accept space
.
Take agriculture as an example, vast forests are destroyed to
alte
take in solid food
eat
alter
allot
by farm lanes,
hence
,
species
lost their
habitats
Suggestion
habitat
and
also
their food
scource
the place where something begins, where it springs into being
source
sources
. Another reason is that global warming is
emegered
marked by extreme anger
angered
by industry, gas emission and so
on which
Accept comma addition
on, which
could establish many disasters like permanent drought,
el
nino
Suggestion
Nino
.
For example
, a great drought in
australia
a nation occupying the whole of the Australian continent; Aboriginal tribes are thought to have migrated from southeastern Asia 20,000 years ago; first Europeans were British convicts sent there as a penal colony
Australia
early 2019 killed million creatures,
that is
horrible disaster or many marine's
species
are dying
everyday
Suggestion
every day
because they swallow rubbish
in
Suggestion
of
water. Having said that, remarkable animals disappear follow
timeline
Suggestion
the timeline
because
human's
Suggestion
human
activities.
Thus
, it is very
irresponsibility
Suggestion
irresponsible
if we keep it out of sight seeing. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, protecting animals is our duty because we made
this
bad circumstance.
Moreover
, our
next
generation could only see many rare and beautiful
species
on pictures
instead
of actual creatures.

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