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"Written books are not needed because we can read almost everything on the internet". Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#books #internet
Printed books are not considered as necessary as it was since we can now get access to the Internet. Personally, I partly go along with
this
 statement.
First
 of all, books themselves are, as far as we have known, great source of information synthesized from the beginning of time. In fact, on the eve of the printing press’ invention, people used to to make handwriting books which
is
Suggestion
are
, to me, a very complicated and time-consuming process.
Secondly
, they are
traditional tool
Suggestion
a traditional tool
 that we are
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 in the
first
 place. A good example of
this
 is that parents often showed us books to encourage reading more.
Finally
, books make it easier for poor-conditioned people to improve their background knowledge by reading.
On the other hand
,
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 is one of the most convenient
invention
Suggestion
inventions
 of human beings due to its benefits bringing to us.
Initially
,
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 allows us to have quick access to knowledge.
For instance
, we can look up a new word much quicker via the internet rather than
by
Suggestion
from
in
 a dictionary, a traditional means of storing and explaining glossary.
Moreover
,
this
 global network includes a wide range of books with latest edition uploaded so that we hardly need to purchase one when it is available online.
Lastly
, it provides us with a limitless storage to save experiments and knowledge permanently which seems impossible to books. In summary,
books particularly
Accept comma addition
books, particularly
 do benefit us;
however
, the Internet remains undefeated because its undeniable advantages aforementioned to our daily routine.
Submitted by vietnhando2003 on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization, accessibility, socioeconomic barriers, dissemination, real-time, misinformation, misleading, necessitating, over-reliance, traditional knowledge sources, collaborative learning, interactive, engaging educational experience
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