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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples form you knowledge or experience.

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As a
consequent
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consequence
 of it the local
business
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 comes to an end. With the death of local communities. It can either be agreed or disagreed that the expansion of
supermarket
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 affects the local communities.
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 essay will discuss on the pros and con of the
supermarket
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 in some countries with its consequents. As everyone
are
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is
 very busy,
Supermarket
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 brings various products under one roof. It is very much comfortable for customers to get every
products whether
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product, whether
product whether
 seasonal or non-seasonal, local or international brand and small to big.
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, in the month of
may it
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may, it
 is very difficult to find crackers in local
business
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 where as in
supermarket
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 it will available.
the
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The
 small
communities mainly
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communities, mainly
 depend on their local
business
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. If the cut throat competition from
supermarket
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. They are not finding difficult to survive
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, fruit seller in the local market only posses few varieties and that to it depends on
season
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the season
. Like it is difficult to get mangoes in winter season in
local market but
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the local market, but
the local market but
 one can find in
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supermarket
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the supermarket
supermarkets
a supermarket
.
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 making it difficult to run a local
business
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 which was running for centuries. To conclude, I partially agree with
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, though supermarkets are threat to the local communities but they are serving their customer

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