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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples form you knowledge or experience.

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As a
consequent
Suggestion
consequence
 of it the local
business
 comes to an end. With the death of local communities. It can either be agreed or disagreed that the expansion of
supermarket
 affects the local communities.
This
 essay will discuss on the pros and con of the
supermarket
 in some countries with its consequents. As everyone
are
Suggestion
is
 very busy,
Supermarket
 brings various products under one roof. It is very much comfortable for customers to get every
products whether
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product, whether
product whether
 seasonal or non-seasonal, local or international brand and small to big.
For instance
, in the month of
may it
Accept comma addition
may, it
 is very difficult to find crackers in local
business
 where as in
supermarket
 it will available.
the
Suggestion
The
 small
communities mainly
Accept comma addition
communities, mainly
 depend on their local
business
. If the cut throat competition from
supermarket
. They are not finding difficult to survive
for example
, fruit seller in the local market only posses few varieties and that to it depends on
season
Suggestion
the season
. Like it is difficult to get mangoes in winter season in
local market but
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the local market, but
the local market but
 one can find in
supermarket
Suggestion
the supermarket
supermarkets
a supermarket
.
Thus
 making it difficult to run a local
business
 which was running for centuries. To conclude, I partially agree with
this
, though supermarkets are threat to the local communities but they are serving their customer

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