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Some people think it is better to give donations to local charitable organizations, while others choose to give to national or international bodies. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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These days, donating money to the needy is a humanitarian activity that has been embraced by individuals around the world. While some people deem that donors should do charity straight to the local community, my conviction is that it would be better to support the national or international charitable foundations. On the one hand, a number of philanthropists opt to directly give financial support or contributions of tangible items to the local funds. The reason is that local charities have a better understanding of their locality’s demands and local context via hands-on conversation with suffered people.
For example
, knowing the issue of fresh water deficits in south western Vietnam, local foundations prioritize to build a water supply station
instead
 of road expansion.
In addition
, people who give donations to local charity are aware of their social responsibility for
local community
Suggestion
the local community
local communities
 where they live or work.
This
 means that they often give direct donations to local organizations to draw the public’s attention in the local area.
On the other hand
, I argue that donors should prefer to provide help or support national or international organizations.
Firstly
,
this
 is because international charities are major organizations which could provide financial and human resources to aid in emergencies
such
 as epidemics, natural or man-made disasters, as well as long-term planning. The World Heath Organization,
for instance
, not only released one million dollar from its emergency fund, but
also
 mobilized a number of doctors to address the outbreaks again of the Ebola virus in Africa, which is impossible for local organizations.
Secondly
, misappropriation of funds is becoming an issue of broad interest in fundraisers.
However
, it is harder for officials or international charities to embezzle funds from contributors because they are under
such
 scrutiny and subject to the laws of various nations. In conclusion, in my opinion, national or international charitable organizations are still preferable to local ones due to the above reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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