Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way ton reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

People have different
view
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views
about whether giving longer
prison
sentences
is
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are
the best way to reduce
crime
or there are better ways to reduce crimes. It seems to me that we have more ways to reduce
crime
than longer
prison
sentences. On the one hand, there are many benefits of giving longer
prison
sentences.
Firstly
, if we
giving
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are giving
give
longer
prison
sentences, many criminals will be more feared and scared and not to commit crimes again. It is the best punishment for wrongdoers, it
help
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helps
to prevent a serious threat to society.
Secondly
, citizens feel safer and more secured when lawbreakers
is put
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are put
into the
prison
.
For example
, in a residential, there are many
burglar
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burglars
, so the residents very
worry
marked by keen caution and watchful prudence
wary
weary
. If
criminal
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the criminal
a criminal
is put into the
prison
people feel comfortable. On the
orther
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
outer
others
hand, there are
more better
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better
more good
ways to reduce
crime
than giving longer
prison
sentences.
Firstly
, the criminals will be put on probation if they commit minor
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
such
as: pick pocketing. The lawbreakers
was followed
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were followed
by
police
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the police
make sure that the criminal will not
reoffend
money returned to a payer
refund
in sociability.
Secondly
, if the criminals become
good person
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good persons
a good person
good people
after reform offenders, the government will decrease the
prison
sentences. They will rehabilitate to the society earlier than they expected.
In addition
, the criminal should join in vocational training or take part in community service. The wrongdoers will
ghet
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
get
got
a job after being released. In conclusion, I think the governmen
t ha
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has
v
e more bett
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better
er ways to reduce
crime
and help they rehabilitate to society

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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