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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

Nowadays, elementary education program in various countries includes another
language
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besides
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 their
mother-tongue one
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mother tongue
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. Many experts approve
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this
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of this
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 early approach to foreign
language
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than
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rather than
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 starting to learn in secondary school.
This
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 essay of mine shares the same opinion. On the one hand, disadvantages
of
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to
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 learning languages at
primary
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a primary
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age
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. Some people argue that a new
language
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 should not be introduced to
children
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 as they believe that learning a new
language
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 is confusing and wastes
time
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, could delay development of child's first
language
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. Actually, primary students’ schedule is more open and flexible so a wide range of
time
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 can be utilized for acquiring a second
language
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.
Second,
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primary students have to devote much of their
time
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 to their schoolwork,
learning
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and learning
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 compulsory subjects.
Furthermore
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, students have to learn many more subjects and other subjects are more important at that
age
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 (maths, mother tongue
language
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, science), which means that less
time
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 is contributed to learning a new
language
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.
On the other hand
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, advantages
of
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to
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 learning languages at
primary
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a primary
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age
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.
Firstly
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, young
children
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 learn faster, they are less self-conscious or shy, they pick up the pronunciation better and
on
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in
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 the long run, they can pronounce more correctly and fluently in their
adolescent
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 and
teen
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teenage
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age
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,
they
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and they
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 enjoy copying and learning through games. In our modern days, hi-tech devices like smartphones,
tablets
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and tablets
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...are very popular in daily life, and they are quite accessible to
children
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.
Secondly
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, nowadays languages are just as important as maths as learning a new
language
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 is a much more useful therapy for kids to explore the world naturally. In conclusion,
although
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 there are some benefits of introducing a new
language
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 to secondary students, it is recommended that
children
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 are acquainted with a second
language
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 at an earlier
age
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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  • foundational skills
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