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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #subjects #people #waste #time
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Most of People go to
school
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 for at least 10 years of their life and spend a huge amount of
time
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 there. In the
school
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, there are many subjects and some of them are not really interesting. Some people believe that spend many years in the
school
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 to learn about the
subject
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 they do not like is wasting their
time
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. In my opinion I
am not agree
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don't agree
do not agree
have not agreed
 with
this
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 statement because of two reasons.
First
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, some subjects might be
boring but
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boring, but
 they teach important skills and
knowdlege
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 for living and working. I believe every
subject
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 in
school
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 are
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
choosing
 carefully and thoroughly by a group of wise people. These people take into account the requirement for future workforce and the skills people should have to perform work well in order to build education programs for student.
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, my primary
school
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 started teaching me about computing when my country was having machine revolution at the same
time
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.
This
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 computing skills
was
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were
 critical for studying and working in the 21
century which
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century, which
 my primary
school
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 had
acknowdlege
recognized or made known or admitted
acknowledged
 and would prepare the best for their student.
Second
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, people might not like the
subject
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 at the
first
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time but
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time, but
 when they know more they will find it more interesting.
Thing
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The thing
 takes
time
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 to understand and love.
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, my sister did not like to play piano in her aged seven.
However
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, after one year spending in music class, playing piano is becoming her
first
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 favourite habit. It
also
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 brings lots of happiness moment for her and people around her. In conclusion, it is not right to say that study something you not like is a waste of
time
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. People will find
subject
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 worth learning and brings some benefit for them in the future.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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