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Every year an increasing number of students choose to go to another country for their higher education. Do you think the benefits of this development outweigh the problems associated with it?

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The past twenty years have seen a dramatic change of the number of students who go abroad
to begin
 college in China. In
this
 essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, both students and their country can benefit from
this
 trend.
First
, students can choose more suitable education methods for themselves because there are more options. The course and teaching methods are quite different from China. According to foreign experts, the higher education in China is really not
good as
Accept comma addition
good, as
 that of those developing countries, especially
in contrast
 with
Europian
of or relating to or characteristic of Europe or the people of Europe
European
 or US.
Secondly
, people can improve their foreign language, but, they can contact with others when they are in a foreign country, and they will quickly master the foreign language.
Thirdly
, it helps to promote the mutual understanding between their
mother land
the country where you were born
motherland
 and their destination countries. These students exchange information with the locals. Students can get
better understanding
Suggestion
a better understanding
 of the destination countries. People in their home country will get more vivid information about other countries through these messages.
Similarly
, the locals
also
 can get more clear recognition about other countries.
On the other hand
, there are disadvantages too.
Firstly
, it costs people a lot of money
to begin
 college in foreign countries. Many families have to take out all their savings to support their children to go abroad.
Secondly
, some students cannot stand the big difference of the new environment, they maybe quit their study and come back home. To conclude, given the
undisputable
not open to question; obviously true
indisputable
 fact that
to begin
 college in foreign countries helps students with their studies and promotes the mutual understanding between countries, even if there are some drawbacks, I think the benefits outweigh the problems.

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