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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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Eating healthy is one of the biggest problems for some people.
This
 is due to the lack of
time
 to prepare a healthy meal and the increasing number of fast
food
 available.
This
 essay will discuss in depth the causes and propose a solution to
this
 problem. Nowadays people are spending more
time
 at work and it has been difficult for them to find
time
 to prepare their own meals.
As a result
, they end up buying frozen meals
that
is
Suggestion
are
 high in fat and there are fewer nutrients that directly affect their
diet
. A recent research in the UK shows that people are buying 60% more frozen
food
 compared to 10 years ago.
In addition
, the increasing number of fast
food
 chains is attracting more people to consume unhealthy
food
. Because of the facility to stop at drive-throughs, many people decide to buy their meals in their way home.
For instance
, in Australia all the Mac Donald’s are open 24 hours,
this
 is due to the high demand of people buying
food
 late in the
day
.
On the other hand
, people preparing their meals on the weekends could easily solve
this
 problem. The majority of people have at least a
day
 off;
this
day
 can be used to prepare meals for the week so people would not have to worry about what they are going to eat the
next
day
.
For instance
, I have a
day
 off on Sundays and I
make
Suggestion
have been making
 my meals for 7 days,
this
 saves me
time
 and makes me have a balanced
diet
. In conclusion, the two main difficulties to have a balanced
diet
 are lack of
time
 and the facilities of having fast
food
 available all the
time
.
However
,
this
 problem can be solved using one
day
 of the week to prepare healthy meals and
this
 will result in a healthy
diet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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